Essay Writing

When it comes to essay writing, I feel that I have more weaknesses than strengths. My introduction usually comes across as strong, but everything else can be mellow or weak. My conclusion is probably the weakest of the entire essay. It lacks originality and very simply restates what has already been said in an uninteresting way. Another weakness that I have is not having my thoughts more organized or collected. Many of my essays seem to be sporadic and can sometimes be jumpy. I tend not to plan my essays out, I just sit down and try to get them done in one sitting. I do read through it once finished, but there are only minor things that I change. I feel as though that I’ve put so much into trying to write a whole essay, with no planning, in two hours that when I reread it, I don’t put much effort into the revision process. This is how my writing becomes messy, and my marks falter because of it. 

If I could change one thing, it would be the voice of my essay. I wish that it could be as strong as I intend to make my essays. It seems though that I can't put across what I am trying to get out in a powerful and convincing way. I believe to prefect my essay writing, I need to sit down and plan the entire thing out first. I hate this process as before I found it a waste of time, but I now realize that it is imperative to a successful essay and a successful grade. 

My name is Holly Nussey and I am going to give you a glimpse into my desperately average life. I'm an 18 year old Highland Dancer-that's the one with the kilts, bagpipes and swords. I drink an abundance of coffee and have an irregular circadian rhythm, which my nocturnal cat appreciates.

 My sleep is particularly disordered because it’s winter… I hate winter. I miss the sun, and the heat that comes with it. I love the beach and my shore fix just can’t be met in this season.  My beach affair began when my older dance friends got their drivers licenses, and we had too much summer on our hands. When I am not at the beach, you’ll likely find me in the dance studio, on stage or at dance competitions. This summer, I have the opportunity to compete at Canadians, which will be held in London this year. The song my team is dancing to is “Sleeping Maggie”. As exciting as Nationals are, getting nominated for a scholarship has been an even more thrilling experience. Following my nomination, I got to travel to Chicago and compete against the best in North America for the Sadie Simpson Scholarship. I got to partake in classes and choreograph my own solo number. 

(Heather, Holly M, and myself in our solo dance costumes in Chicago)

While in Chicago, I got to visit the Chicago Aquarium and indulge in deep dish pizza. I also was fortunate enough to view the city of Chicago from an elevation of about 1128 ft, or 100 stories, inside the John Hancock Center. Aside from dance, my existence is fairly mediocre.